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Title: Turn the pink facade into gray
Post by: crexes on Dec 15, 2024, 10:03 PM
Hi all!
Here's a more rock-inspired track than I usually write, with some playful lyrics to keep it light — would love to hear some feedback!  :)

crexes · turn-the-pink-facade-into-gray

Turn the pink facade into gray
 
Monday morning I step outside
Sun is smiling and I wonder why
Am I caught in a scene?
Not sure what it means
 
Meet my neighbour miss Grumbleford  with her
Angry dog that suddenly seems to wag his tail
Tell me - what is going on?
 
Hit the café and the owner looks weird and says: "The cost of your new life is the end of your old one"
Give me a break   
 
Arriving at the work, and the team applause me, my boss is high-fiving 
Sure - give me a break.
 
Chorus
Hey you - what is wrong with my ordinary day?
Hey you - turn the pink fake facade into gray - please
 
Post Chorus
I see the masks they wear,
I feel the fake tears,
I hear the hollow cheers,
Just drop it
 
Off from work and heading to the bar,
People seem to think I'm some kind of movie star - and I wonder
Who's got the remote control?
 
Getting drinks named after me and they
Snap selfies when my eyes can barely look straight anymore - but
They don't seem to care
 
They mix my last drink, call it 'The Star',
I'll take one sip, so bizarre,
I've gone too far

When walking home, I quietly pray
No more play just give me - a regular day

Chorus x 2
Hey you - what is wrong with my ordinary day?
Hey you - turn the pink fake facade into gray - please

Post Chorus
I see the masks they wear,
I feel the fake tears,
I hear the hollow cheers,
Just drop it

Title: Re: Turn the pink facade into gray
Post by: subvibe on Dec 16, 2024, 08:53 AM

Hi

Nice song with a great flow
vocals are super also the harmonies 

Well Done

subvibe
Title: Re: Turn the pink facade into gray
Post by: ChrisPrice on Dec 22, 2024, 06:01 PM
When it kicked in I'm thinking, this isn't really a rock song, but I love the way this progresses. I love some of the incidental stuff. The vocals are first class. I wish I could hit some of thos top notes! A great track. :)
Title: Re: Turn the pink facade into gray
Post by: Vicki on Dec 23, 2024, 04:49 PM
I don't understand the lyrics at all; I mean I understand the words, especially since you provided the lyrics--thank you for that!--but I don't know what it means. It definitely is a fun-sounding piece, though. Very danceable.
Title: Re: Turn the pink facade into gray
Post by: crexes on Dec 27, 2024, 08:35 PM
Quote from: Vicki on Dec 23, 2024, 04:49 PMI don't understand the lyrics at all; I mean I understand the words, especially since you provided the lyrics--thank you for that!--but I don't know what it means. It definitely is a fun-sounding piece, though. Very danceable.
Hi Vicki and thank you for taking the time to listen and give me feedback! :)
The lyrics is about a guy who wakes up to a surreal day where everything seems perfect but fake. He realizes that he rather embrace the authenticity of his ordinary gray life than live behind a hollow, pink façade.

I will try to make the lyrics clearer next time!  :D
Title: Re: Turn the pink facade into gray
Post by: crexes on Dec 27, 2024, 08:42 PM
Quote from: ChrisPrice on Dec 22, 2024, 06:01 PMWhen it kicked in I'm thinking, this isn't really a rock song, but I love the way this progresses. I love some of the incidental stuff. The vocals are first class. I wish I could hit some of thos top notes! A great track. :)
Hi ChrisPrice - thanks for the nice words! Glad you liked the incidental stuff - I was back and forth if I should keep it or not! :)
Title: Re: Turn the pink facade into gray
Post by: crexes on Dec 27, 2024, 08:43 PM
Quote from: subvibe on Dec 16, 2024, 08:53 AMHi

Nice song with a great flow
vocals are super also the harmonies

Well Done

subvibe

Thanks Subvibe for the feedback! :)
Title: Re: Turn the pink facade into gray
Post by: Mora Amaro La Loba on Dec 29, 2024, 02:11 PM
Hola @crexes
It's a great song, really enjoyable and entertaining, super vocals too, I liked everything here.