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#91
The Bar / Re: What are you listening to?
Last post by icystorm - Jan 05, 2026, 04:51 PMThe incredibly talented Chiara Kilchling produced an excellent cover of Nothing Else Matters in her unique and special style. The song was originally recorded by Metallica.
#92
Feedback on Finished songs / Re: Bleed In Public And Call I...
Last post by Elvis Nash - Jan 05, 2026, 03:32 PMQuote from: Vicki on Jan 04, 2026, 04:29 PMYou so have a way with words! Makes me "see" everything. This is great!
Vicki
My wife liked it , but I think she wants money , thanks
#93
The Bar / Re: What are you listening to?
Last post by icystorm - Jan 05, 2026, 01:50 AMI was never a fan of Weird Al Yankovic or the Crash Test Dummies. I'm not a fan of novelty songs! LOL!!! 😂🤣 Yet, I have to admit that the Mmm Mmm Mmm Mmm song is so ridiculous that it's funny for a minute or so. Weird Al got into the act with his parody of the song and made it even funnier, especially if you're old enough to remember the actual news events he spoofs in the lyrics.
Crash Test Dummies — Mmm Mmm Mmm Mmm
Weird Al – Headline News (parody of Mmm Mmm Mmm Mmm)
Crash Test Dummies — Mmm Mmm Mmm Mmm
Weird Al – Headline News (parody of Mmm Mmm Mmm Mmm)
#94
Lyrics / Re: Broodin'
Last post by SebMood - Jan 04, 2026, 09:11 PMHey!
Thanks for the great feedback!
I've now decided on version 3 because I personally feel it the most and I think it conveys the feeling most concretely without being too generic... That's exactly why I decided against the "it steals the night" line, because in this context it's perhaps too 'straightforward' or "generic" for me... I think the lead is a good idea. Maybe I'll come up with an alternative to "Broodin' s" at the beginning of line 3... Do you think version 3 would work well as a chorus?
In any case, you have described exactly the feeling I wanted to create. Maybe that's a good sign?
Thanks and best regards!
Thanks for the great feedback!
I've now decided on version 3 because I personally feel it the most and I think it conveys the feeling most concretely without being too generic... That's exactly why I decided against the "it steals the night" line, because in this context it's perhaps too 'straightforward' or "generic" for me... I think the lead is a good idea. Maybe I'll come up with an alternative to "Broodin' s" at the beginning of line 3... Do you think version 3 would work well as a chorus?
In any case, you have described exactly the feeling I wanted to create. Maybe that's a good sign?
Thanks and best regards!
#95
Lyrics / Re: Broodin'
Last post by Vicki - Jan 04, 2026, 08:12 PMIt depends somewhat on what vibe you're after. For instance, are you planning on a kind of melancholy lament? Or simmering frustration? Or even raging anger? At the moment, all your options feel melancholy to me. Based on version 3, I'm thinking you're after a more urgent feeling of frustration. The setting, of course, can contribute to the feel. Rhyming all four lines would, in my opinion, also express frustration better, which you have done in all three versions. Perfect rhymes are too stable for any negative vibe, so I wouldn't use version 2.
If you're after a more frustrated feel, I would consider leaning toward words or phrases like "pounding", "reverberating", insomnia gnawing at you, trapped in sleeplessness, agony of wakefulness, "spiral", "exhaustion", "wired", "desperate".
Based on your repetitions of the word "broodin'", you're probably more after the melancholy feel. In this case, I still prefer stronger phrases. Like, maybe "Locked in wakefulness in bed" (to keep your rhyme scheme), or something with "Locked in fearfulness". Could you use something to indicate the heaviness of sleeplessness by using the word "lead"? Like maybe, "Fear weighting me down like lead". I think that could be made better, though. I would need to think longer.
I like your "steals the night" phrase. I like the echoes in the head, but I like "reverberations in my head" better.
I'm not sure which of your three I like best. Maybe you could combine some of the elements of each.
Anyway, there are some ideas. Use any if you like or ignore them all if you don't. Ideas freely given with no expectations.
Vicki
If you're after a more frustrated feel, I would consider leaning toward words or phrases like "pounding", "reverberating", insomnia gnawing at you, trapped in sleeplessness, agony of wakefulness, "spiral", "exhaustion", "wired", "desperate".
Based on your repetitions of the word "broodin'", you're probably more after the melancholy feel. In this case, I still prefer stronger phrases. Like, maybe "Locked in wakefulness in bed" (to keep your rhyme scheme), or something with "Locked in fearfulness". Could you use something to indicate the heaviness of sleeplessness by using the word "lead"? Like maybe, "Fear weighting me down like lead". I think that could be made better, though. I would need to think longer.
I like your "steals the night" phrase. I like the echoes in the head, but I like "reverberations in my head" better.
I'm not sure which of your three I like best. Maybe you could combine some of the elements of each.
Anyway, there are some ideas. Use any if you like or ignore them all if you don't. Ideas freely given with no expectations.
Vicki
#96
Hello everyone & Happy new year!
I'm currently working on a chorus line and am very unsure which version is best and what might seem too "generic" or could be improved... I would appreciate it if you could give me your feedback...
Version 1:
Broodin', broodin', broodin'... -sleep has crept under the bed/
Broodin', broodin', broodin'... -scared by the chaos in my head/
Broodin', broodin', broodin'... - all my fears are being fed/
Broodin', broodin', broodin'... -it steals the night, nothing is left/
Version 2:
Brooding, brooding, brooding... -like echoes in my head/
Brooding, brooding, brooding... -how much further will it spread?/
Brooding, brooding, brooding... - all my fears are being fed/
Brooding, brooding, brooding... -Insomnia is bred/
Version 3:
Broodin', broodin', broodin'... -Sleep has crept under the bed/
Broodin', broodin', broodin'...-I'm awake, my legs won't rest/
Broodin', broodin', broodin'...-my fears are waitin' to be fed/
Broodin', broodin', broodin'... -every night, these doubts are bred/
High five!
I'm currently working on a chorus line and am very unsure which version is best and what might seem too "generic" or could be improved... I would appreciate it if you could give me your feedback...
Version 1:
Broodin', broodin', broodin'... -sleep has crept under the bed/
Broodin', broodin', broodin'... -scared by the chaos in my head/
Broodin', broodin', broodin'... - all my fears are being fed/
Broodin', broodin', broodin'... -it steals the night, nothing is left/
Version 2:
Brooding, brooding, brooding... -like echoes in my head/
Brooding, brooding, brooding... -how much further will it spread?/
Brooding, brooding, brooding... - all my fears are being fed/
Brooding, brooding, brooding... -Insomnia is bred/
Version 3:
Broodin', broodin', broodin'... -Sleep has crept under the bed/
Broodin', broodin', broodin'...-I'm awake, my legs won't rest/
Broodin', broodin', broodin'...-my fears are waitin' to be fed/
Broodin', broodin', broodin'... -every night, these doubts are bred/
High five!
#97
Feedback on Finished songs / Re: Bleed In Public And Call I...
Last post by Vicki - Jan 04, 2026, 04:29 PMYou so have a way with words! Makes me "see" everything. This is great!
Vicki
Vicki
#98
The Bar / Re: What movies or shows are y...
Last post by icystorm - Jan 04, 2026, 02:29 PMDune (1984) is my favorite film adaptation of the story. Francesca Annis delivers, by far, the most elegant and beautiful portrayal of Lady Jessica in the Dune franchise. Overall, it's a very good movie, and I rate it 7 out of 10 stars.
To fully grasp the story, especially the great Houses and their histories, you should read the book and watch the film more than once. The novel itself earns an 8 out of 10 stars from me.
⭐ 7/10 — A very good movie and a rewatchable gem! 🍿😊
Interesting side note: the soundtrack was composed by Toto.
Deleted scene from the movie with the lovely Francesca Annis:
To fully grasp the story, especially the great Houses and their histories, you should read the book and watch the film more than once. The novel itself earns an 8 out of 10 stars from me.
⭐ 7/10 — A very good movie and a rewatchable gem! 🍿😊
Interesting side note: the soundtrack was composed by Toto.
Deleted scene from the movie with the lovely Francesca Annis:
#99
Feedback on Finished songs / Re: Bleed In Public And Call I...
Last post by Elvis Nash - Jan 04, 2026, 11:41 AMQuote from: icystorm on Jan 03, 2026, 07:47 PMQuote from: Elvis Nash on Jan 03, 2026, 11:53 AMYeah biker bar crowd all that , thanks
With all of your recent tracks, you should have enough for a new album. Any plans?
What would I do with it ? I've done that , sold maybe a 200 cds . The costs don't ROI. You don't really don't know how strange this world is after talking to some fans . Some people are completely nuts . I made the mistake on putting my phone number on it , Man don't do that lol. people calling at 2am
#100
Feedback on Finished songs / Re: Bleed In Public And Call I...
Last post by icystorm - Jan 03, 2026, 07:47 PMQuote from: Elvis Nash on Jan 03, 2026, 11:53 AMYeah biker bar crowd all that , thanks
With all of your recent tracks, you should have enough for a new album. Any plans?